Matt was only 17, but already he was excited to get a car. As he stood against the window of the BMW dealership, he watched as several customers were escorted around by salesmen, getting in and out of cars, filling out paperwork, and discussing pricing. It was only December, and Matt didn't have his full license yet, but he wanted a car almost more than he wanted to get into college. While he observed the people inside, the cold December air whipped across his face, reminding him to pull up his hood, and wipe off the little pile of snow that accumulated on top of his head.
Matt always loved cars, and knew almost every model, who made it, and what year it came out. Walking down the street had become a sort of game for him, naming every car that passed. Standing there, Matt turned away from the wind as a strong gust blew the snow across his nose, which wasn't covered by the hood on his old jacket.
"Fuckin' wind" Matt muttered to himself. He turned back around, and walked inside the dealership. Taking the first step inside warmed him up right away. He unzipped his jacket and his hoodie, pulled down his hood, and waved to one of the salesmen.
"Yo Matty, my man, hows it goin'?" asked the salesman.
"Not bad. Maintainin' haha. You know how it is". Matt responded.
"Hey Tony! You guys still have the black M3?" He asked.
"Of course Matt, we keep it waiting for you haha. Whens your old man coming by to get that for you?" Tony said jokingly
"Mannn, screw you Tony! You know he wouldn't even buy me a 20 year old Ford." Said Matt, in a perturbed way.
"Not with your grades, you bet your ass he wont. I'm just busting your balls Matty. He's a good guy your pops. C'mon, I'll take you to the car."
Matt followed Tony to the back of dealership, where "his M3" was displayed. Tony grabbed the keys from his desk, and let Matt into the car. Every time he came here, Matt always liked to imagine himself in the car, with his girlfriend sitting upfront, driving out on the highway on a warm summer day. His girl, his car, and nice weather, was all Matt wanted. But as of now, the weather sucked, and he wasn't getting that BMW any time soon.
Thinking about the car was what Matt did every moment he wasn't at the dealership, but once he was sitting behind the wheel, with his hand on the shift, his thoughts changed to paying for the thing. $40,000 wasn't cheap, but it didn't matter if it was $400,000, Matt wanted that black M3. Looking to the left, Matt heard the passenger door click, and Tony got inside.
"Matt" Tony said.
"You've been coming here for god knows how many years now, but you never ask me about anything other than the M3. Before this one came out, you came to look at the older model. Your a good kid, but I can't for the life of me figure out why you focus on these cars, but not on school." Tony said, looking intensely at Matt.
"I know you can do good kid. You got high expectations for yourself. I know that. If you didn't, you'd be staring into the window of the used Toyota dealership right next door. If you want something, you gotta work for it. People don't live life wanting beat up cars, they want new Benz's and BMW's like you do.
"Tony, I appreciate what your trying to do. I really do, but I get enough advice at home, and I get it, I really do. I just don't like school, but I work hard at home and at my job. I know what I need to do Tony. You don't know everything." Matt said calmly.
"I gotta go Tony, thanks again."
"Anytime Matty, just swing by." Tony said, as they both got out of the car.
Matt waved goodbye to Tony, zipped up his jacket, and his hoodie. Put on his hood, and walked out of the dealership. Stepping outside, Matt looked back at the dealership, glanced at the Toyota lot, and than looked right back at the BMW's. Matt laughed to himself momentarily as he walked through the waves of snow racing down from the sky, and the mountains of snow at his feet. Crossing the street, and with the wind once again whipping across his numb face, he thought to himself; "If I didn't want a BMW so badly, I would settle for a Toyota"
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Jakob, I liked how your story was very subtle and you didn't spend time talking about the persons clothes and what they have, as most people might be tempted to do. You focused on the actual person and their personality and goals which is a deeper version of cool than how someone looks. You chose to write a story about a very real person who doesn't try to be cool and just knows what he wants in life and tries to get it. This story was written well and gets across a real version of cool, good work.
ReplyDeleteYeah I definitely agree with marco. You took it to another type of cool. Instead of worrying about their exterior points you decided to WRite how his inner person felt about things, and that alone i being cool. A story like this is cool because it isn't about being a bully or being the best-dressed in school, you talk about motivation to get that BMW. And stuff like that is what makes cool go into a deeper meaning then what everybody thinks it is. ALso I would like to say that this is a well detailed story. It isn't a broad one. It's a story where I can picture exactly what is going on at each moment and that shows that your story is very good. I really enjoyed reading your story and look forward into reading more of them throughout this cool unit!
ReplyDeleteThis was a really nice story, very subtle which is kind of like my story and a few others I have seen. I feel even though you didnt' speak about his clothing or his fancy doodats and junk the car is a pretty big idea of what to have in order to be cool. Being able to own fancy expensive things is cool but only if you work hard and earn in. Being spoiled is seen as uncool for the most part but it seems hardwork and determination is seen as cool, espeically if it gets you expensive things. I really liked this story, it took a different setting then most people's story's who wrote about teenagers at school. Your was at a car dealership which is pretty random but cool. :)
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